Sunday 25 April 2010

NaPoWriMo #25 - The threats hang like stone-coloured clouds

The threats hang like stone-coloured clouds

Behave. If you don’t behave, you’ll get no
That’s not yours, is it? No, it isn’t.
icecream. No, or pop.

So sorry, he seems to have a mind of his own when it comes to

Don’t put that in your mouth! It’s
whether or not to listen.

dirty. See? Not nice having sand in your
Get away from the dogs!
teeth, all gritty. Yuck.

I don’t think they want to eat sand from your spade
Don’t pick up other people’s rubbish. Oh,
and they might think it’s okay to eat you.

okay, well, don’t play with it – let’s just dig a hole
The sea does sound like it’s roaring, doesn’t it?
and bury it there. Go on, dig!


  1. Excellent use of today's prompt! Good one!

  2. Sometimes we hear lots of things we'd much rather not be subjected that my kids aren't little, it can be endearing, entertaining, and sometimes alarming to hear parents speaking to their little ones. Very nice job on this.

  3. I love the layered voices! Lovely.

  4. Yes, I love how you interspersed the voices. Kind of makes one cringe, doesn't it, listening to parents with their children sometimes. Really smart poem!

  5. Thanks everyone – always appreciate the comments the Read Write Poem community offers up!


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